In response to Rebecca's prodding, here's a first, incomplete draft of something. We'll see where it goes.
controlled exhalation
connects me to a continuum
millennia of musicians pulsating
down a quantum river that flows
from measure one to some theoretical
double bar line at the end of the page
they swarm
condensing into
movement of lips and hands
as I draw inspiration
their yellowed song
my oxygen
they spiral from the horn
brought to life for a flash of ecstasy
nameless but beheld resurrection
6 comments:
Hey Paula. Yeah, I'm definitely going to play around with that first bit, and surely it will get pruned. BTW, for you and anyone else who reads this, I'm wondering about "draw inspiration": does it work, or is it hackneyed--too obvious?
RT/PG
Helm,
Good point, and I see what you mean. Resurrection good, zombies bad ;-))) Well, as I said, it's a first musing, posted mostly just to see what it looks like out of my head.
RT
p.s. I hope you don't mind the crass link to my book. I'm trying my best to sell them. Apparently the masses aren't going to beat a track to my front door demanding their very own signed copies. r.
Hey Rebecca,
Thanks for the preview. Very vivid writing, and it made me ponder why the sax is such a sexy instrument--I'm thinking because it appeals equally to both sexes, somehow managing to be both phallic and vaginate at the same time...
As for the link, I had already downloaded the flyer from your site. No need to appologize.
RT
Teper,
I haev saoured your latest post, too busy/woozy too comment -- but it is a joy when musicians write on music.
I think it is the voice of the sax-- the hoarse, and yes, possibly in-between male/female: could be Tom Waits, could be -- who is a throaty female singer now...
Anyway -- this draft has a poem in it.
Aish-oo
Hi Aish,
You wouldn't recognize the latest incarnation. But unfortunately, my laptop stopped booting last Thursday and I'm worried I've lost it. I'm going to make some last ditch efforts to save the data on the disk this week. Otherwise, it's back to the drawing board Wish me luck!
RT (that'll teach me to hoard stuff and not post it on my blog)
Post a Comment